Feedback November

I like your script. It is cinematic and adopts the codes and conventions of the genre.  You have re-drafted to ensure accuracy and are leading the group.  An excellent knowledge of the genre is shown.

Targets

Publish your storyboard and provide detail about shots used.

Film 

Edit

Consider sound and titles to add meaning and atmosphere

Create a schedule for successful time management

You are working at level 3

Aim for level 4